I love what you did with the first-person narrative here, how you gave us this exqusitive look into Makoto's mind. It really explains everything, doesn't it.
That's what I was aiming for! I'm glad you feel that this explains her reaction and his pain... and why Minako might be able to find a chink in Makoto's armour. :3
I wish he would resent me. Argh, this is so sad. So, so sad. But so, so good.
It would make it easier for her if he was similarly conflicted. But he isn't.
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Date: 2011-03-18 06:46 pm (UTC)That's what I was aiming for! I'm glad you feel that this explains her reaction and his pain... and why Minako might be able to find a chink in Makoto's armour. :3
I wish he would resent me.
Argh, this is so sad. So, so sad. But so, so good.
It would make it easier for her if he was similarly conflicted. But he isn't.